When you hear the word EVEN, what immediately pops into your mind?
EVEN vs ODD (numbers)? EVEN STEVEN (an equal distribution)? An EVEN, flat surface? EVEN THOUGH (although, despite)? or EVEN SO (regardless)?
Each of those interpretations is 100% valid. But in literary terms, the four-letter word EVEN on its own is primarily used to provide emphasis. But once invited into sentences, it has a sneaky tendency to infect multiple sentences without a writer’s conscious intention. Is it any wonder EVEN and JUST are thick as thieves?
For this 2nd post in the Sneaky Words series (if you missed the 1st post about JUST, click here). I’ll help you evaluate when it’s appropriate to let EVEN stay and when you should kick it to the curb. In the following three examples, it helps to imagine a 16-year-old boy responding to his father’s complaints. Here’s an image from Newsweek to help you imagine the confrontation:
EXAMPLE #1:
“I moved the lawn and EVEN cleaned out the garage! Please let me go to the beach with my friends! “
STAY? If the father has repeatedly been asking his son to clean out the garage, or knew it needed to be done but considered it an impossible task, then yes, emphasis is warranted.
LEAVE? If this is the first time this point is mentioned, hit delete. “I mowed the lawn and cleaned out the garage! ” is more direct and appropriate in this case.
EXAMPLE #2:
“I don’t EVEN get off work until 10:30PM. I’ll be too tired to take out the trash when I get home.“
STAY? If this is the last point the boy is making to strengthen his case, then let EVEN stay.
LEAVE? If this is the only point the boy is making, EVEN isn’t necessary. Try this instead:
“I don’t get off work until 10:30. I’ll be too tired to take out the trash when I get home.”
EXAMPLE #3:
“The score was tied at 3-3 even, and I scored two of the runs!”
STAY? Nope! Tied = EVEN, so this is a case of unnecessary repetition. Scored and score are mighty similar, too.
LEAVE? Yes!
EXAMPLE #3 REVISED:
“We tied at 3-3, and I scored two of the runs!”
I hope you agree that eliminating repetitive words improved the sentence and didn’t change the meaning!
As with JUST, you can root out overuse of EVEN by drilling down to Find under the Edit menu in Microsoft Word. The reason I highlighted these two sneaky words is that I see them overused quite frequently, both in unpublished and published works. I recently began reading an e-book with well-drawn characters, intriguing world building, and a fresh take on a popular Disney story. Sounds great, right?!? Unfortunately, glaring overuse of EVEN marred my enjoyment and made me abandon the book halfway through. So this is my advice to writers everywhere: before you hit submit, do JUST and EVEN CHECKS of your work!
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